英语四级写作高分训练月计划第三周：星期三（7）

　　七、每日佳作赏析
　　 Directions : For this part , you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Making All Decisions for Children . You should write at least 120 words , and base your composition on the outline given below in Chinese :
　　1.很多家长习惯于替孩子作决定，如选择学校，选择工作等。
　　2.分析这种现象给孩子带来的影响。
　　3.你的看法是……

　　 范文
　　 In modern society , traditional patriarchy is still influencing Chinese parents . They (1) tend to make almost all decisions for their children , (2①) from (3①) choosing schools (2②) to (3②) picking up a profession . (2④) Sometimes even many detailed things (4) such as clothing and diets have to be decided by parents .
　　 (5) However , deciding everything for children does (6①) not help them (6②) but harm them in many ways . (7①) On the one hand , it will make children lack independence and initiative , (8) which (9) is unfavorable to their development (10) in the long run . (7②) On the other hand , in many cases , parents' decisions are not always (11) in accordance with their children's personal ideas and interest . it will make children form resistance and naturally influence their growth .
　　 (12) From my point of view , (13①) it is unwise for parents to make every decision for their children . (13②) It is obvious that parents cannot accompany their children all the time . Growing to be independent is the natural way for everybody . Therefore , parents should give their children rights to make their own decisions . They can help their children (14) but not replace them to make choices .

　　点评
　　(1)意为“易于……，有……倾向”。
　　(2)针对all decisions做进一步说明，富有层次感。
　　(3)都表示“选择”，用词富于变化。
　　(4)表示列举。
　　(5)转折引出下文，使上下文过渡自然、衔接紧密。
　　(6)意为“不是……而是”，用于连接并列成分。
　　(7)意为“一方面，……。另一方面，……”。
　　(8)which引出非限制性定于从句。
　　(9)意为“不利于”。
　　(10)意为“从长远来看”。
　　(11)意为“与……一致”。
　　(12)用于引出个人观点。
　　(13)it充当形式主语。
　　(14)意为“而不是，而不要”。