【原】It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.
【改】It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.
【原】It will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and everyone of the Chinese people
【改】Our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.
【原】This book will help you master the basic elements of good writing.
【改】This book will help you master the basics of good writing.
【原】The search of the forest that they conducted was entirely complete.
【改】The search of the forest was complete.
【原】Whenever anyone telephoned her to ask her for help with their homework she always obliged right away.
【改】She immediately obliged anyone who telephoned for help with homework.
【原】Lu Hao graduated last summer. He joined the First Auto Works in Changchun soon after graduation. He received an engineering degree from his college. 采用从句能将这三个简单句以不同方式连接起来。
【改1】After graduating last summer with an engineering degree, Lu Hao soon joined the First Auto Works in Changchun.(介词结构+主语+谓语)
【改2】An engineering degree-holder, Lu Hao joined the First Auto Works in Changchun last summer soon after graduation.(同位语+主语+谓语+状语)
【改3】Having graduated with an engineering degree, Lu Hao joined the First Auto Works in Changchun last summer.(状语+主语+谓语）
【原】The Art of Strategy was written by Sun Tzu’s. It is a fifty-six-hundred-word Chineseclassical work. The writer put forth a set of principles in a very tightly compressed manner. They deal with how to defeat oppositions and win battles.
【改】In his fifty-six-hundred word classic, The Art of Strategy, Sun Tzu put forth a tightly compressed set of principles for achieving triumph over opposition.
【原】Proverbs are short sayings. They are drawn from long experience.
【改】Proverbs are short sayings drawn from long experience.
【原】People change and places change as well. Jennifer felt this strongly. She had been away for eleven years.
【改】On returning after an eleven-year absence, Jennifer had a strong feeling of how people and places change.
【原】Beijing streets are crowded with taxis, company cars and private vehicles owned by the newly affluent. The number has been rising rapidly in the last few years. The latest statistics show there are now 1.2 million vehicles in Beijing alone.
【改】Taxis, company cars and private vehicles owned by the newly affluent have crammed Beijing streets in rising numbers in the last few years 1.2 million vehicles at last count.
【原】Moby Dick is a book. It is a long book.It is about a whale.A man named Ahab tries to kill it. Her man Melville wrote it.
【改】Her man Melville wrote a long book called Moby Dick. It is the story of a struggle of a man against a whale.